I’ll Never Forget That Sunday
One Sunday morning I snuck out of the house with some friends. We knew we would get into trouble so we all said we were going to each others house! So we headed off to the shops. We bough ice-cream, donuts and clothes. I nearly slipped over because I didn’t see the sign saying ‘Caution Wet Floor’. I was luck my friends were there. After the shops we went over to the public pool except you have to go with a parent and it doesn’t open on Sundays. We thought it would be so much fun so… we went in! I didn’t want to go in because my secret is ‘I can’t swim’. I still put my feet in and splashed with my feet. All of a sudden my friend came out and pushed me in! I almost drowned! I was shocked!
Luckily one lifeguard came in to clean up from the day before. He saw me and dived in and saved me. He yelled at me because we were in there when we weren’t supposed to be but I was happy because I was alive. When we got home we all got into loads of trouble. I mean, grounded for life sort of trouble! I guess I deserved it because I snuck out out and nearly got badly hurt.
My mum was very worried but happy at the same time because I was alright rather than being in the hospital!
Holly
March 18th, 2008 at 4:37 pm
Good work Holly I wasn’t sure what was going to happen with the ‘Caution Wet Floor’ but I knew it was going to be interesting. I liked the way you built the action using ! punctuation. I also liked the emotions you described using words like ’shocked’, ‘deserved’ and ‘luckily’.
No one would know you wrote this in just 20mins.
March 20th, 2008 at 1:41 am
Cool story i thought it was good you deserved a thumbs up :}
March 21st, 2008 at 4:40 am
Hi I’m Holly and I wrote this hope you liked it!
March 21st, 2008 at 5:30 pm
I like Holly!! Who typed it in??
March 24th, 2008 at 10:15 pm
That was a great story Holly. If this is a real story I always snuck out like you did in the story even when I was in year three but back then I was with my friends parent even though my parents said I couldn’t go his place, so I got in a lot of trouble. But the story was really good. Bye.
March 26th, 2008 at 3:45 am
Sorry It wasn’t meant to be ” I like Holly” It was suppost to be I like it Holly
March 26th, 2008 at 11:16 pm
Great Story
April 9th, 2008 at 3:38 am
That was a great story holly i liked it
April 30th, 2008 at 8:06 pm
That was a great story.It was very good.
May 21st, 2008 at 1:56 am
Great story Holly I really enjoyed reading that and I wished there was more!!!!!!!!